A trace of blood

I crept downstairs only to find that the sound was not there. A couple of minutes later, I heard a scream, not any old scream. A scream from my house! I ran, only to discover that no one was there, but a trace of blood leading up out of the window… What do you think I should do? You will find out.

A gloomy figures footsteps approached in deadly silence. the figure ran. Then the lock clicked and the figure was there. As quickly as I could I raced for the door but the figure stopped me in my tracks….

Ellie & Sam

7 thoughts on “A trace of blood”

  1. Very mysterious! Even the title ‘hooked’ my interest. The ending made me shudder! Did the main character survive? Good work!

    I liked the way you explored the voice of the main character, making him/her talk directly to the reader, “What do you think I should do? You will find out.” I am not sure that it is entirely successful. Try reading the challenge and leaving that part out. I think it works better without it – you may disagree! Creative work though. Well done!
    Mrs. E.

  2. Great story Ellie and Sam! Your adjectives were amazing! I will surely check out your site again!

  3. Reading this gave me the shivers, and I LOVE stories like that. You did a really good job, and I hope you will write more!

  4. Wow! What an exciting title and I like how you draw the reader in. Good use of fronted adverbials too.

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