On a Friday night, me and my two brothers called Epeli and Denzel had a sleepover at my Granny house.
The next Morning my Granny decide to take us to the park. While we were playing, I heard my Granny screamed, Help! Help!.
So we ran over to her and I asked her, “What happened Granny? “She replied in her terrifying voice and said ,looked”.
We looked up and there’s a Huge Spider.
To be continued…
Tony
To Tony, your work was interesting, but it needs improvement. It had an interesting story-line but it requires correct punctuation.