Attack of the Dead

It was a dark and gloomy night, when Gemma was lying in her bed then suddenly her bedroom door creaked open.She slowly hid under her covers.SLAM!!.The door shut Gemma slowly drifted of to sleep. The next morning Gemma turned the music full blast.BOOM BOOM BOOM the door went ,I’m coming hold your horses!” Gemma shouted

When Gemma answered the door there was no one there she turned her head so that she could see round the corner then the lock clicked and something grabbed her from behind.Her phone started to ring it was 999 she answered it, the man(or women) sounded deadly who was it on the phone…

Libby & Lilly

One thought on “Attack of the Dead”

  1. Exciting writing ladies! The deadly voice on the phone is a creepy cliff hanger!

    To make your work even better, double-check your punctuation.

    BOOM BOOM BOOM the door went ,I’m coming hold your horses!” Gemma shouted.

    Was Gemma shouting Boom! Boom! Boom? I can see where the ‘speech marks’ end but not where they begin!

    Keep up the good work!
    Mrs. E.

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