The Monsters were banging on the door, then the lock clicked and they tried to come in ready to eat me.So I rushed to the cupboard I looked for the rope that I had made because I knew the Monsters were going to attack soon and now I was going to use it. I tide it on my window sill and climbed down it just as the Monsters limped into my room and I quickly, ran to my friends house but there was no one home or they accidentally fell asleep even though so I went inside and fell asleep.
Amy & Poppy
Creative work. Those limping monsters sound scary. Maybe you could have explored alternatives to ‘limped’: lurched, lumbered?
Take care with punctuation. This part needed a little more editing:
‘I tide it on my window sill and climbed down it just as the Monsters limped into my room and I quickly, ran to my friends house but there was no one home or they accidentally fell asleep even though so I went inside and fell asleep.’
Maybe this would be better:
I tied it on my window sill and climbed down it just as the Monsters limped into my room. I quickly ran to my friend’s house but there was no one home (or they accidentally fallen asleep). So I went inside and fell asleep.
Keep up the good work! I am looking forward to next week’s writing.
Mrs. E.
Thank you Mrs.Evans
You are welcome! 🙂
Thanks Mrs E
Hi amy and poppy i agree with Mrs.Evans.Okay im going now.BOO!