Monsters

The Monsters were banging on the door, then the lock clicked and  they tried  to come in ready to eat me.So I rushed to the cupboard I looked for the rope that I had made because I knew the Monsters were going to attack soon and now I was going to use  it. I tide it on my window sill and climbed down it just as the Monsters limped into my room and I quickly, ran to my friends house but there was no one home or they accidentally fell asleep even though so I went inside and fell asleep.

Amy & Poppy

5 thoughts on “Monsters”

  1. Creative work. Those limping monsters sound scary. Maybe you could have explored alternatives to ‘limped’: lurched, lumbered?

    Take care with punctuation. This part needed a little more editing:
    ‘I tide it on my window sill and climbed down it just as the Monsters limped into my room and I quickly, ran to my friends house but there was no one home or they accidentally fell asleep even though so I went inside and fell asleep.’

    Maybe this would be better:
    I tied it on my window sill and climbed down it just as the Monsters limped into my room. I quickly ran to my friend’s house but there was no one home (or they accidentally fallen asleep). So I went inside and fell asleep.

    Keep up the good work! I am looking forward to next week’s writing.
    Mrs. E.

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