One gloomy and dark night, I was on my way back from the Halloween disco when I heard a suspicious cackle from in the distance. I ran and ran until my legs were burning and couldn’t take one more step. I panicked in terror I knew I had to get home and quickly. After a while, I felt I had enough energy to run back home. After a few minutes I had made it. I closed the door behind me then the lock clicked and I was face to face with the beast. The world went black.
Jasmine & Ruby
Hi Jasmine and Ruby,
Well done, I really liked your story. I really liked the way you used the prompt. Your punctuation is great. I can tell you both have great imaginations.
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After a while,
One gloomy and dark night,
After a few minutes,
Fronted adverbial-tastic! Excellent work ladies!
The ending is delightfully mysterious. Well done!
Mrs. E.
Well done, that is a great story, I wish it was more than 100 words.
Oh no! Face to face with the beast! That would be a terrifying sight.
That story was so suspenseful and scary that I felt too as if I was in the story, running from the beast.
Great job, Jasmine & Ruby.
John.
What would happen if the character hadn’t gone in the house?
Well she would have got killed anyway because there was a cackle so there must have been another beast out there.
Great story! I loved the description you used in this awesome story! I will definetly come back and see your posts! I would love if we could exchange comments sometime! My classes link is: https://kidblog.org/class/mrs-golds-class-507b/posts
Keep up the awesome work!!
You were great. You could authors with that. Keep doing great!
I agree with Mrs Evans lots of fronted adverbials! I really like the last line too and how you leave the reader wondering what happens next!
I love this story so so much. Great work, I can’t believe your authors.